2007年10月31日 星期三
Halloween
Today was Halloween, for celebrated this holiday; we had an activity in our company. Every child had to make up like a monster. Then we had to sing a chant loudly and had a parade around the cram school. First stop, we arrived a convenient store; every child had to sang out loud the chant, and the shopkeeper gave them some candies and a cup of drink. Second stop, we got to clinic, sang the chant, and got the candies from the nurse. Last stop, we went to a restaurant, and did the same thing. Then we went back to the school. Children were felt happy about parade because this was their first time to do that. They felt quite interesting and exciting. During the whole activity, I took a lot of pictures about teachers and students. These pictures are quite funny but scary. I think this is an unforgettable experience for everyone.
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Too many errors here. Proofread your posts more carefully. Your verb tenses are inconsistent. That makes reading your words annoying.
"Today was Halloween," ==> "Today was Halloween." This is a complete sentence and requires a period, not a comma, which comma-splices it to the next sentence.
"for celebrated this holiday; we had an activity in our company." This is terribly messy. It should read thus: "To celebrate this holiday, we had an activity in our cram school."
"we arrived a convenient store" ==> "we arrived at a convenience store".
"Second stop, we got to clinic, sang the chant," ==> "Our second stop was a clinic, where we sang a chant,".
"Children were felt happy about parade" ==> "The children were happy about the parade".
"They felt quite interesting and exciting" has two possible corrections. 1: "They felt that the parade had beenquite interesting and exciting" -- this tells us what the children felt about the parade; 2: "They werequite interested in and excited by the parade", which tells us how the children felt after the parade.
"I took a lot of pictures about teachers and students. These pictures are quite funny but scary." These words are strange and a bit silly. First, the proper preposition is "of", not "about". Second, I don't understand how pictures of a bunch of kids dressed up in Halloween costumes can be "scary". You need to explain that silly statement.
although there are errors in your post but i can understand what you want to say
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